Advice Through Ethereal Walls

Kimberly

2008-03-16T16:42:00.003-05:00

This is my comment to Kimberly. She saw that the skills of collaboration and communication are important for school. So I decided to help further her sight a bit. You can see the post here. Grrrr... just saw the spelling error in the comment, wish you could edit comments on those blogs.

Hello Kimberly,

You have good foresight when you believe that cooperation and communication will be important in highschool and university but you can also look beyond this to the even more important work world. There are very few jobs that are completely solo. What would really get done if everyone worked as an individual?

There are chains of cooperation and communication in the work world. We'll take sometihng popular like a videogame for example. What we see is just the finished product but there is so much behind that and it isn't just one person. First there are a group of people who brainstorm a concept. That concept is proposed to their bosses. If he/she likes the proposal and the analysts say it will make money then it starts being made. Here's where the cooperation and communication explodes into action. There are writers for the storyline, concept artists, 3d modellors, animators, computer coders, marketers, legal teams, sound technicians etc. Behind almost anything there is some sort of collaboration. Some peoples jobs are purely just to initiate collaboration!

You have probably heard the anecdote (a saying with a bit of wisdom in it) that goes "Two heads are better than one.". Well if that's true are three heads better than two? Three hundred better than three?

Sincerely,
GreyMW
Student Mentor

Sara

2008-03-10T23:06:00.003-05:00

Science Fair's rock! Thought I'd inform about a little known awesome fair that seems like too much but really isn't (Chris and I were going to enter it this year but our most promising idea of converting blood types into O- was discovered and relatively recently (even more irking was that we had the basic idea of how to do it right! But alas I digress...)). If you would like to see Sara's post you can view it here

Hello Sara,

I'm glad to see that the fruits of your labor paid off even before the fair! Would really like to hear how you did. Anyway, I don't know if this is available in Snow Lake but maybe next year you could try out the Sanofi Aventis Biotech Challenge if you enjoy science fairs. This competition may seem very foreboding and tough BUT at the grade 7 or 8 level it is not that terribly involved (though it is a fair amount of work but believe me the awards dinner alone is worth it.). If you are interested don't look at the descriptions of some of the projects as those are probably by the grade 12 geniuses (such as the guy that had the promising alternative to chemotherapy, he won the grade 12 competition for Canada and ended up with over 15000 dollars in prize money). That being said when my friend and I entered the first time we studied how two enzymes in your stomach and intestines break down protein (little did we know at the time that this has been thoroughly investigated). The next year we decided to study natural preservatives such as ascorbic and citric acid (basically lemon juice and vitamin A/C, I can't remember). Anyway we had a blast and won both years so it is very possible. It is not possible to enter this year anymore, but if you or any other driven classmates want to participate I urge you to check it out.

Sincerely,
GreyMW
Student Mentor

Kate / Joey

2008-03-02T21:11:00.003-06:00

Read Kate's/Joey's blog post. Seemed to enjoy the Egyptian project so thought I'd whet her palette with a couple other civiliazations. Kind of confused as to what this persons name really is though, link says Kate, blog says Joey. You can see the post here.

Hello Joey (AKA Kate right?),
Glad you liked the Ancient Egypt unit. If you enjoyed that you would probably like reading about the Ancient Greeks or Norse peoples. I personally don't know too much about their cultures as I'm just a mythology buff. But search up the ones you find kinda interesting out of the following outlines of stories about Ancient Greek and Norse mythologies, it is a neat insight into their culture.

Greek Mythology (Interesting to note that opposed to our stories nowadays these don't really have many happy endings)

Narcissus and Echo (Personal fav)
A story about how echo's came to be and the Narcissus flower (along with narcissism, look it up it's a good word). It has the moral of not to love those who cannot show love for you.

Tantulus
A story about the punishment of a foolish king. With the punishment being rather interesting and rather famous. The punishment is that he is given unquenchable thirst and hunger but the kicker is that he is trapped in a river neck high and the water recedes every time he tries to drink. There is also a fruit bearing plant above him but whenever he reaches for the fruit the wind blows it out of his reach.

Bellerophon
The ultimate hero in Greek mythology (or he is in my opinion). Slays many beasts and tames the Pegasus. Tries to join the gods on Mount Olympus but Zeus casually shoots him and the Pegasus out of the sky with a bolt of lightning.

Other things to look up greek mythology-wise:
Perseus & the Medusa/Gorgons
Artemis the huntress
Persephone Wife of Hades
Titan Gods; Birth of Zeus
Chaos, the beginning of Greek mythology

Norse Mythology:

Skadi
Has to choose her husband by his feet

Ragnarock
The final battle of the gods and giants, kinda like the rapture or the apocalypse

Freyja & other Valkyries
Sheildmaidens that take the souls of fallen warriors into the halls of Valhalla where they fight to the death every day in preparation for Ragnarock (and in those halls they are called einherjar).

Other things to look up:
Loki the trickster
Fenris the Wolf
Thor and his hammer
Balder/Baldr the beautiful

Hope you enjoy a little bit of the insight into these peoples if you look them up.

Sincerely,
GreyMW
Student Mentor

Lana

2008-02-13T23:02:00.001-06:00

Well been awful busy of late. Finally got back to this and a new topic to comment about! Yay! You can see her post here.

Hello Lana,
That is a great topic for a research project! There is loads of information on it. So much in fact that are you planning on focussing on a certain aspect on it (i.e. big business' role, genetics etcetera)? Or are you going to go for a broad overview of the many aspects? Planning this sort of thing out early really makes the finished product better quality and generally easier (I didn't believe that for a long time, but as the projects get bigger it really is the truth.)

Cheers,
GreyM
Student Mentor

Devon (WIP)

2008-01-20T13:25:00.000-06:00

Thought I found a gold mine in Devon's post. He has link to an essay he did but it brings me to a site that cannot be relevant (searchmachine.com or something similar). Can't wait to read it as I was really into Egyptian mythology for a while and just never thought to research the pharoahs.

FYI: WIP means work in progress, I don't know if it is commonly used so I thought I'd clear it up.

Hey Devon the link to your essay doesn't work... brings me to searchmachine.com. Would love to read it (I was quite into egyptian mythology for a long while and their culture is fascinating). I'll check back or you can drop me a comment at:

http://advicethroughetherealwalls.blogspot.com/

Just leave it under any post. I'd leave you my email but I don't know if that would be appropriate.

ttyl,
GreyM
Student Mentor

Adrian

2008-01-13T22:25:00.000-06:00

Well don't know if this comment actually worked on Adrian's post as it did not act like the others. Decided to go for a conversation as I find that generally works better than just questions with no feedback. I had to do a project closely relating to fear so I have loads of information at my disposal for future posts.

Hello Adrian!

Is fear powerful? (I ask you this because your word is fear and because you have thought critically about power before)

Comment back( Here as well!), if I disagree with your viewpoint then we'll make this along the lines of a debate otherwise I'll have more evidence for you to back up your answer with.

Sincerely,
GreyMW
Student Mentor

Andy

2008-01-07T19:11:00.000-06:00

From Andy's post I could see the unique difficulties with online collaboration but he didn't mention any unique positives so I figured it would be good to ask. You can see it here.

Hello Andy!

I see you had a fairly good time doing this project. I must ask what are the unique positives of working with people from elsewhere that you would have missed out on if you had just worked with people in your class? (I only asked this because I could only see the unique difficulties and not the unique positive from your post)

Cheers,
GreyMW
Student Mentor

Francesca

2008-01-02T05:13:00.000-06:00

Wow, I haven't come to realize just how late I'm commenting today. Well what happened with this comment is that the most recent version of my comment was not actually copied, but I really only have a copy of the version prior to a few revisions. The post can be found here and here is the comment, keep in mind that it is in fact subject to change once the comment if approved and is displayed underneath her post.

"Hello Francesca,

Great job reflecting on what troubles you encountered during the progress of your project as well as how you have benefited from it. I also noticed that in your post you signified the explicit importance of teamwork.

So if you didn't have to carry out this project in a group, how do you think your approach or overall appeal to the project would have changed? On another note, you quickly described how you realized one should act when working with an organized group. During the course of this project, were there any other qualities or virtuous attributes that would detail a good leader that were either frequently shown or altogether neglected? And overall, what do you think constitutes a good leader? What about a good group member?

If it helps, try to think about other moments in your life when you undertook a leadership position and you might be able to reflect upon them to extract some of the aforementioned qualities in question. I think that reflecting on work that you have completed before is undoubtedly where you can achieve the potential for maximum growth in your character.

Now before I depart, I really hope that you had a great holiday season and I'd like to wish you a happy new year! Have a great 2008. =)

Arrivederci,
MrSiwWy - Student Mentor"

Tiffany... & Friends

2007-12-20T22:16:00.000-06:00

Well I was thoroughly happy to see a project when I scrolled through Tiffany's blog. Seeing that they focused on physical survival I decided to send them in a different direction. You can see the post here and the project here.

Hello Tiffany, Christian, Skyler and Brianna!

I had a look at your project and thought that it was pretty good. You have a few grammatical errors here and there but nothing incomprehensable. As I was looking through it I saw the many aspects of physical survival that you pointed out. Now they did not only have to survive physically but mentally. In your opinions what kept them going through that experience, what kept them from going bonkers?

Ta-ta,
GreyM
Student Mentor

Brianna

2007-12-18T20:28:00.000-06:00

Well before I completed this comment on Brianna's blog, I attempted to verify whether Graeme had already commented on her blog recently or not. It just so happens that he has in fact posted a comment on a blog by Brianna... though that comment pertained to a different Brianna (phew). Anyway, the basis of this comment lies within the post here.

"Hello Brianna,

It's really great to see how you've succinctly identified not only how you have grown due to the completion of this project, but also where improvements could be made for future endeavors.

Do you think that if this project were entirely oriented around a single classroom (and not over the internet in any way) you would have received the same overall benefit from the project? How do you think that manipulating the way a project or assignment is to be completed alters the educational value of the project? Do you think that completing such projects in the same manner each time takes away from the intrigue and benefit of the project in any way? What about a task requiring a unique approach or method to complete?

Now as I stated earlier, you've successfully identified any downfalls you encountered during this project and how they can be compensated for in the future, but I think you should heed your own suggestions and future tasks head on and really think about them prior to starting another task. If you continually think about what went wrong last time before you start with a new task, it would probably contribute to your progression as a student or with almost anything that you may encounter.

Take care,
MrSiwWy
Student Mentor"

Not entirely sure when I'll have free time again in the near future, but my next comment probably will not be until then (though I'll probably post a few during the break).

Christian

2007-12-17T19:15:00.000-06:00

Comment to Christian, can be viewed here.

Hello Christian,

When I looked at your post the fact that you put an image there made me relate this to my current experiences. At the moment I'm preparing for my S4 English exam and one of the tidbits we really have to look out for and analyze is imagery. I am curious to know why you chose the skull imagery, is there more to it then just the obvious?

Auf wiedersehen!
GreyM
Student Mentor

Vanessa

2007-12-11T22:36:00.000-06:00

Like Chris I think I may have been a tad overzealous here...

Hello Vanessa,

I have recently been immersed in a couple aspects of writing lately and would just like to share a bit of the knowledge with your response here.

At one point you say, "I think that the word that fits in the most in chapters eleven and twelve is the FRIENDSHIP. I think that this word is best for these two chapters because of the note that Johnny left to Ponyboy.", do you notice anything that could be changed to make that more interesting to the reader?

The repitition of "I think" could be avoided. Repitition is good in some situations for stylistic punch but should be used sparingly lest your piece sound like writing by numbers (a reference to that coloring by numbers we probably did when we were far younger). Instead you could use a couple of different starts to those sentences to make them more interesting: "In my opinion ...", "My comprehension is that... ", "I'm convinced" and if your like my fellow mentor Chris, "From thorough analysis my cognitive pathways have found... " (he writes pretty scientifically), but still it is interesting if you can understand what is said because it is different.

Another tidbit I'd like to take up with you is something called verb-tense agreement. The two sentences, "It showed that they were really good friends. This really shows that they love each other as friends.", sound conflicted. This is because of the way the word show is used. In one it is referring to the past the other is referring to the present about the same topic at the same time. Kind of hard to be done and doing at the same time... get my drift?

Au revoir,
GreyM
Student Mentor

P.S.
Can you reply here as well as at:
http://advicethroughetherealwalls.blogspot.com/
Having a *really* rough time seeing comments on these blogs.
Thank You!

Michael

2007-12-06T00:47:00.000-06:00

I think I might have been a tad overzealous when I was commenting on Michael's blog, but the thoughts consistently poured out. Here is the comment, and you can find this comment and the corresponding post here, hope it was a great one.

"Hey there Michael,

Good job with your post summarizing these two chapters, though there might be some grammatical errors that you can fix. I find that writing a lot, even outside of school, tends to contribute to your progression and skill with using language in meaningful yet elegant methods. Also, I think you did a great job staying concise and right to the point with the ideas in your post.

Now, as I read through your post, I was particularly intrigued the statement: “The sounds of the shot then the pain and suffering you can hear is painful…” Did you intend for this statement to be entirely literal or did you attempt to implicate something deeper? Have you ever learned anything on double meanings? And if you really did intend this to be an implicit emotional conveyance, do you think that you can apply emotions that you felt or feel have a great connection with to any other events in these chapters?

There’s nothing wrong with trying to imply deeper meaning, in fact it might give the audience more insight into the significance of your statement and might even be used to project it’s true meaning or any accompanying moods or emotions that may be applicable. I find it to be good habit to try to expand the methods in which you approach your writing endeavours and in any way try to say as much as you can with as succinctly as possible.

Note that if there is any vocabulary present in my comment that you might not be familiar with, it would probably be a good idea to research then to help expand your overall language skills. Don’t be deterred by large words; try to let them entice you to pursue more knowledge.

Cheers,
MrSiwWy"

Darn it, I forgot to indicate that I'm a student mentor. =/ Though I hope that someone informs him or that he is already aware of this fact.

Katie

2007-12-03T23:07:00.000-06:00

From a couple lines in this I'd have to say this girl is a wonderful writer. The one line I quoted struck me so I decided to prod for some more info. You can view it here.

Hello Katie!

I'm glad to see that you enjoyed the book. I'm sure your future read-throughs will bring you many hidden details and deeper meaning.

You say, "The word that I would choose would be survival, I chose this word because they made it through a tough part in life, they fought for who they wanted to be and who they were, they tried…they won…they survived.", do you think that the people who died in a way survived as well? Is a short noble life one that is better than a long one of cowardice but overall good living?

Sayonara,
GraemeW
Student Mentor

P.S. Can you please post your response under the Katie post of http://advicethroughetherealwalls.blogspot.com/ as well as here because I'm having a *really* hard time seeing comments on these blogs.

Brandon

2007-11-25T00:46:00.000-06:00

Decided that I'd mix Brandon's obvious liking of videogames (see post after the one linked) with the observations in his post (which was very impressive). You can see the comment here.

Wow, great post! From what I can see your a pretty bright kid. So I won't spare the hard questions.

You say that his [Ponyboy's] senses are dulled from all the traumatic experiences. Do you think that virtual experiences (video game/movie violence) can end with a similar kind of psychological numbing?

The experiences you have in life and how you respond to them give one definition of who you are; how have the experiences Ponyboy has gone through define him (What kind of person has it made him)? So how do the experiences and how you react to them in video games and movies define/effect us?

Cheers,
GreyM
Student Mentor

Tyler

2007-11-25T00:30:00.000-06:00

My first mentoring comment for the "Thinwalled classroom" blog, and I must say that it took a while to analytically dissect the students' posts to find something I could constructively comment on to help them with their educational endeavors. This first post was in response to a post on Tyler's blog which can be found here, in which he presented a synopsis of the final chapters as well as his interpretation of the story's finale. Here is the comment in full:

"Hello Tyler!

First off, I’d like to say that you did a good job summarizing of the final chapters of the novel. In fact, it turned out to be a great review of the novel for me (it’s been quite a while), so I thank you for that! (= There was one thing that caught my eye in your post, however.

Towards the conclusion of your post you stated that “Survivel best tells these chapters”. How do you believe that this characteristic (Survival) fits the ending of the story more so than any other? What idea or event in the final chapters of the story do you think best signify survival? Moreover, how do you think that the story or it’s ending would have changed if survival didn’t play such a large role in these chapters?

Don’t be discouraged to think outside of the box or to try to take on a unique perspective on something. It’s great to expand the way you look at things, since there isn’t always one definite way to approach an idea or concept.

Take care,
MrSiwWy - Student Mentor"

I know the format is very similar to Graeme's, but I thought consistency throughout the blog shouldn't hurt anyone.

Brianna

2007-11-24T22:34:00.000-06:00

Post on Brianna's response to the end of the novel. Really latched on to how she didn't want this book to end. Love that kind of book. You can see her post here.

Hello Brianna!

Seems that you really liked this novel! You say, "I really wished there was a chapter 13", well what would be in it? Are there any loose ends in the story that are not covered? Anything that you'd like to know more about? If you had free reign on one last extra chapter what would you add personally?

Ciao,
GreyM
Student Mentor

Keplyn

2007-11-20T21:49:00.000-06:00

Second mentoring post, can see a problem in the future, lack of ideas pertaining to a small set of subjects... will have to be creative. You can see the comment here.

Hello Keplyn!

I was skimming through your post and this caught my eye:

"... the definition of frienship once again is: the state of being a friend; association as friends: to value a person’s friendship."

In this definition of friendship you use the root word (the word the other is derived from) and the word itself in the definitions. Is this the best way to define a word? Take this for example:

Ataraxia - the state of being ataraxic

Do you know what ataraxia really is from that definition? In the case of friendship we can assume that most people will know what a friend is so using friend in the definition is probably okay. But try to define friendship without using friend or any of it's other forms. It's a bit harder but would be clearer to anyone who doesn't know what friendship or friends are (even though those people may be few and far between).

P.S. Look up ataraxia, a bigger vocabulary never hurts

Hannah

2007-11-17T17:00:00.000-06:00

First comment on the "Thinwalled classroom" blogs. Kind of weird switching off math and turning on English online, requires a bit of different thinking. You can see it here.

"Hello Hannah!

First off I'd like to say that this is a great post as it refreshed my memory of this book very well. Secondly, your word for these chapters is "Friendship" and you linked it to Wikipedia. It gives many different viewpoints (some debatable) on what friendship is but what is yours? (What makes a friend, difference between friendship and acquaintance and so on...). Lastly, did your name is a special sort of word/phrase? You should find out what type it is, a couple other examples are "racecar" and "Was it a cat I saw"?

Cheers,
GreyM
Student Mentor"